August 3, 2011

Write on Wednesday (4)

Hey guys!  So although I'm cutting it a bit close, today is Wednesday and that means my fourth attempt at WoW (and no, I don't mean the interactive computer game...).  If you guys haven't seen my previous posts for this project, or just haven't had a chance to check it out, you should jump right on over to InkPaperPen to check it out.  Go ahead, I'll wait here. :)

This week's prompt was a single phrase:  "The clock winked".  Our assignment was to take this sentence, and use it to write whatever came to mind over the course of five minutes.  I'll be honest:  I spent the first two minutes like a fish out of water, with no idea what to write, as though the art were a totally new form to me.  I'm not entirely happy with how it came out, but I think I'm proud of the general premise of it.  
What do you guys think?  Let me know in the comment box, please!

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The clock winked.

Mona was convinced that it had, despite being well aware that her eyes were playing plenty of tricks on her these days, and what was to stop this from being one of them.  But it had winked at her.  In a mocking sort of way too, as though it knew it had full power over her, and intended to use that for all it was worth.

You’re going to be here forever, the clock seemed to say to her.  I control time.  I can stay right here for hours if I like, and there’s really nothing you can do about it.  

But honestly, it seemed as though it had been days already just since she'd sat down on the kitchen chair which, according to the clock, had been five minutes ago.  Something so small as a second seemed to pass over the course of days for her now.  And days could pass as an eternity.  She had no idea as to how she was going to live the rest of her life.

There’d been a time though, when time seemed to go so fast.  When they knew they had so little of it, and that realization only seemed to result in their having less of it, no matter what they did to make sure they spent every moment being happy together.  What had they done wrong?  Why, after all they’d done to appreciate the time they had, did he have to be taken away in what seemed like the blink of an eye?  Or rather, the wink of a clock.  
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How about you, friends?  Do you want to give WoW a try?  Link up at InkPaperPen so we can all check it out!!

<3 Kiersten

12 comments:

  1. I had a hard time with this one too. But I think you handled it nicely. :D

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  2. It seems that time is playing tricks on poor Mona. It does feel like this on occasion, doesn't it? What happened? How was he taken away? Why? Everything can change in the blink of an eye, you have reminded us all of that with this piece. Great effort!

    Gill x

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  3. How was he taken away?! Were they an elderly couple for whom time went so fast and then cruelly slowed to a painful crawl for the widow left behind? Questions, questions!

    I enjoyed this piece; it engaged me. I think I enjoyed it because of the way you highlight the way time can feel so subjective. keep up the good work!

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  4. Thanks guys :) I'm really glad you all enjoyed it!
    As for what happened to him, I never did quite get around to that. :-/
    Although, Adam - they were not an elderly couple - I imagined them as being young.

    Thanks everyone for reading and commenting!
    <3 Kiersten

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  5. I lost my sister suddenly in March and, although fiction, your writing this week summed up how I feel most days. Beautifully expressed! Thank you for sharing.

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  6. I'm sorry to hear that, Jaimee. I can't imagine how it would feel to lose my brother.
    Although I can not tell you from experience, I'm sure that it gets better with time.
    <3 Kiersten

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  7. Love this. :) I can't wait to get my time on my hand to do this again.

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  8. I love this! Wish i could read more, this so reminds me of myself during my uni days having a war with the clock over it going too fast if I was partying or too slow if I was doing work! xx

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  9. "The blink of an eye, rather than the wink of a clock" - love this! I wonder why he was taken away?

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  10. I'm so happy I found you through "Brunch in April"! Your writing is terrific. Keep at it!

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Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment! It means so much to me, and I really do love reading all your messages! <3